April
07-14-2010, 04:34 PM
A very hot read sundanceai, thank you for sharing your tale with us ;)
rmreading
08-27-2010, 10:34 PM
Probably not qualified to critique - people here with a gazillion posts.... But I liked what you did... The first paragraph was excellent - establishing your theme and transitioning to your story. A close referencing your theme again would have been nice. As it is all are racing to check vacation plans.