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fsugirl10
11-08-2006, 09:53 PM
These are a couple of poems I wrote. I am not a poet by any means but when I start thinking too much... I write strange stuff. But just thought I would share them with you all. the guy who the poems are about is the same guy who is my main character in the story "Darlin" Just to give you an idea who I am talking about lol.

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Footprints in my heart,
You left them there
How is that possible?
You’ve been in my life
For a while now
We were never a couple
Though we went through the motions
You hurt me, you loved me
Gave me every emotion I can think of

You left a footprint on my heart
Even then I knew we couldn’t
But still I wish we had
I have been in love before
Yet I don’t think I am in love with you
You just wont leave me alone
Even when you were no where to be found

Your foot pressed hard on the terrain
Made me cry, made me angry
But you only did it cause you cared
Didn’t want to see me fall
Cause you knew I was more

Footprints stay forever like the moon
Time goes on, we are far apart
Though I still think of you

Will you be more than a footprint in my life?


Darlin, it’s a name
Short and cute
Darlin, it’s a word
Simple and sweet
Darlin, with a southern accent
Good times and laughter
Darlin, whispered
Sexy and hott
Darlin, with an angry tone
Yelling and crying
Darlin, the last time I saw you
Tears and pain
Darlin, not heard
Missing and worry
Darlin, on the phone
Heart pounding and smiles
Darlin, I miss you
Thoughtful and empty
Darlin, good night

Tigrok
11-08-2006, 10:13 PM
Thank you for sharing FSUGirl

I like them :-)

Scorpio8
11-09-2006, 12:25 AM
Nicely done and "Footprints" would be my
personal choice.

It's that concept of "relativity invitation" that
can have such an impact on others.

Leaving something behind that stays within.
Sometimes good, sometimes not the best but
all added up it's the balance between that's keeps us
able to feel either.

chained rose
11-09-2006, 05:43 AM
Beautiful. Expressive and evokative at the same time. Kudos. Write more. Your "strange stuff" is great.

rose

fsugirl10
11-09-2006, 01:10 PM
Thank you for the comments!! I wrote these after I got off the phone and my mind was jumbled so I wasnt sure if it actually made sense.

chained rose
11-09-2006, 01:22 PM
These are a couple of poems I wrote. I am not a poet by any means


News flash by the way -- you have two poems "published" on the internet. You are now officially a poet. Like it or not

fsugirl10
11-09-2006, 01:34 PM
haha thanx rose

hanes_el
11-17-2006, 02:10 PM
just because a line ends, it doesn't mean that there is a pause, you need more puncuation, otherwise it's one giant run on sentence that is hard to say without fainting from lack of oxygen.

other than that, i do like the poems and hope you write more.

Leigh
11-17-2006, 09:15 PM
very nice FSU...you should write more