Turning My Mom Into a Slut

[ROCKETSPEEDFISH]

< Link to picture of my mom http://www.sexstoriespost.com/forums...pictureid=2300 >

Her moans got progressivly louder as she bounced back and fourth on my dick. I looked down at her perfectly shaped ass and her two lower back dimples and traced them up to her curly black hair. "How does it feel fuck your own son?" I asked while grabbing her hair.
Her response was an open mouth with drool slowly dripping out the sides of her mouth, she was in exctacy and complete bliss. I pulled on her hair again, hard. She let out a moronic laugh as I continued thrusting into her. I was loving how much she was loving it, she had let herself completly go into her sexual desires as her body became her mind and at that moment I knew that she was forever mine.

[singleot]

First off, your Mom's hot, congatz on that lol.

The little you've posted sounds good, there's one problem with the flow for me though, when you repeat words in the same sentence like you've done here 3 times, it kind of breaks it up. Make sure you use a spell checker before you post the final draft, you only get 30 minutes to edit.


Her moans got progressivly louder as she bounced back and fourth on my dick. I looked down at her perfectly shaped ass and her two lower back dimples and traced them up to her curly black hair. "How does it feel fuck your own son?" I asked while grabbing her hair.
Her response was an open mouth with drool slowly dripping out the sides of her mouth, she was in exctacy and complete bliss. I pulled on her hair again, hard. She let out a moronic laugh as I continued thrusting into her. I was loving how much she was loving it, she had let herself completly go into her sexual desires as her body became her mind and at that moment I knew that she was forever mine.


Looking forward to reading it.

[ROCKETSPEEDFISH]

Thanks for the feedback, yea i couldn't find the spellcheck button while i was posting it on here.

Yea i only read it myself once over, but i'll try not to use the same words repetitively.

[singleot]

Here is a spell checker you can use, got it from the tools post here on the forum.

http://www.spellcheck.net/

Keep at it, writing can be a lot of fun.

[Caama]

@singleot thanks for that spellcheck link.I also agree with your review of ROCKETSPEEDFISH's story.But seems to me that it is going to be a good dick rising story.

[DH621]

Keep at it, good story.

[wowzzer123]

Take the advice and keep going. It's a good start

[windstar]

great start to a great stort.